I am a new writer and would love to hear constructive criticism. Also, I would like to thank LadyCibelle for her expertise in editing this story. I know I have a long way to go, but with everyone's help, I will make it. If there are any errors you may find, they were made by me since it has been edited by LadyCibelle. This is my first time to post an erotic story, so please be kind.
I am writing this story to Monica. She is an exciting and lovely woman I have had the pleasure to know. If Monica ever reads this story, I hope she likes it because it is the way I feel about her. Only parts of this story are fictional but I wish all of them were real. I have changed her name to protect the both of us.
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I met Monica on the internet and she wrote so beautifully, I could not grasp what she was saying to me. I felt a stirring in my loins that only she could put out. The way she wrote and the things she said were very intoxicating to me like wine to my ears. If she looked and acted the way she talked, I knew she was going to be one hot woman. I knew right then I would have my hands full. She was very passionate with her writing and she wrote like a Siren. We decided to meet for a picnic and talk to each other, just getting to know each other.
I arrived at the park early carrying a picnic basket which contained a blanket, some sandwiches and bottle of wine, sunscreen and linen napkins. She said that she was going to bring something special but it was a surprise and I would just have to wait and see. The morning we were to meet I thought the day was going to end before she arrived.
I saw her sashaying her way to the park and she looked just like the picture she sent to me. She was a goddess and I knew I would have my hands full with her today. She was wearing her red shorts and black halter top with walking shoes. Monica was carrying a small purse and did not seem to have the surprise with her. I did not mention it in case she had forgotten the surprise. She had long brown hair and walked with an air of confidence. She stood about 5'7' and had the cutest little wiggle about her. Her long tanned legs seemed to go on forever and she turned heads, men's and women's, as she walked towards me. She was smiling from ear to ear like she did not have a care in the world. I thought my lungs were going to burst because I had not taken a breath in such a long time. Finally, I remembered to breath and I felt the passion in her from a distance. She had not seen me; she was looking for someone in a red shirt like I told her I would be wearing. When she turned her head from side to side looking for someone in a red shirt, her hair bounced and flipped over one eye. She would use her finger to part her hair and tuck one side behind her ear. Her sparkling eyes locked onto my eyes and she laughed and I knew it was going to be a fabulous day. She came close to me and gave me a soft kiss on each cheek. Her perfume was so intoxicating it nearly drove me mad. I gave her a kiss on the lips and said "Hi." WOW was her response; I did not expect that from you so early.
"Are you my Leo I have been chatting with," she asked? I asked if she was the lovely, passionate Monica that I had been chatting with. She smiled and blushed and said, "Who else were you expecting?" She had a way with words which put me at ease immediately. I picked up the picnic basket and we put our arms around each other and entered the park, strolling like lovers. Again, I noticed that she did not bring a surprise and wondered what the surprise could be. She was a very passionate woman that had me wrapped around her little finger.