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the revised version
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In 2018, I published "A Week at the Lake with My Sister". It was the longest story I had written at over 53K words, so I decided to split it up into five chapters. I made some poor plotting choices, particularly in chapter 4. As a consequence, I received a lot of negative comments on the last two chapters. But the story was published, I learned my lessons from it, and I moved on.
I read every comment I receive, and, as the years went by, I came to dread getting new comments on chapter 4 as they were almost always very critical. I thought about taking down the whole series, but I didn't want to take down that much work, and I did get some enjoyable comments on it. A reader convinced me to rewrite the story to fix the poor plotting choices. I decided to not change the first three chapters, so the new version would be an alternative reality to the original chapters 4 and 5. One decision would be different, and that would lead to a very different story. I decided to republish the whole thing as a stand-alone story. I did that in 2022.
I took all of my stories down at the beginning of 2023, and I republished the revised version on 8/28/23. I got a number of comments saying that the reader liked the original version better and asking me to republish it. So here is the original version combined into one story. The first three chapters are the same as the revised version.
* * * * Chapter 1 * * * *
"You want me to do what?" I asked my sister Kaitlyn in surprise.
"Please, Brandon. Please date Joanna for the summer." Joanna was her long-time best friend. "I think you'll have a great time together, and she really needs to date a better class of guy. It would mean so much to me."
I knew I should have suspected something when Kaitlyn had baked my favorite cake this afternoon. She had waited until I had eaten a big slice before asking. "Joann is nice, and I like her, but we've never clicked. And she can find a boyfriend quite easily on her own."
Kaitlyn sighed. "Yeah, she can, but she always finds the wrong kind of guy." I knew what was coming. "The good-looking, super-confident guys with a lot of money that turn out to be jerks. The last one really did a number on her."
"What did he do?" I did like Joanna as a friend, and I didn't like hearing a guy had hurt her.
"He introduced her to coke." Kaitlyn's anger rose as she spoke. "Then she caught him cheating on her; he apologized and said it was a terrible mistake; she took him back; and when she caught him cheating on her again, he totally blamed her for his cheating."
My jaw dropped. "How could it be her fault?"
"She had gotten flabby; she wasn't giving him enough sex; she was just using him for the coke, and he had wised up." Kaitlyn had counted off on her fingers as she had gone through the list. "All bullshit, but it's destroyed her self-confidence."
"Asshole." I hated guys who treated girls like shit.
"Exactly. He's the worst guy she's dated, but she keeps dating losers like him. That's why I want you to date her for the summer."
I stalled by asking, "Do you know the difference between a porcupine and a BMW?"
Kaitlyn gave me a little grin. "No."
"With the porcupine, the prick is on the outside."
Kaitlyn laughed. "Too true. At least it's been too true for Joanna." Kaitlyn frowned slightly. "Look, Brandon, I know you two have never clicked, but just for the summer, could you do it? It's not like you've got a lot of other options, do you?"
I had broken up with my last girlfriend a little over a month ago. In the three years since I had graduated, I had lost touch with most of my friends from high school. I didn't know a single girl I could ask out now that I was home for the summer. I liked Joanna, and I'd love to have a girlfriend for the summer, but...
"Even though I have a lot of fun with Joanna when she's with you, I've never been able to keep a conversation going with her when it's just the two of us."
Kaitlyn said, "It's because you intimidate her." I snorted. "Seriously. She's always had a big crush on you. She would talk with me all the time about you. I think she's wanted you to like her so much that she's never been able to relax around you. I think you'll have a lot of fun with her once she gets used to being with you."
I had always suspected Joanna had a crush on me, and what Kaitlyn said sounded plausible. Why not give her a chance?
But before I could say anything, Kaitlyn said, "How about this, Brandon; the three of us will go out. If you're having a good time, then act like it's a date. I won't mind being a third wheel."
That was an interesting idea. "What about Paul?" Paul was Kaitlyn's boyfriend. As Kaitlyn and I attended the same university, I had met him briefly a couple of times. He lived three hours away and would be visiting on weekends.
"I don't want to double-date. When Paul's here, I want to be totally focused on him. But during the week, you, Joanna, and I could go out."
"I'd be up for the three of us going out," I added to keep expectations reasonable, "No promises, but I'll give Joanna a chance."
* * * *
Tuesday, Joanna was waiting outside of her apartment building. I hadn't seen her in a long time as she could only afford to go to the local community college, but she looked as good as I remembered her; black hair that came down below her shoulders, dark brown eyes, dark eyebrows, dark lashes that boldly stood out against her light olive complexion, and lips on the thin side that formed a pretty smile when she saw us pull up. She was wearing a white tank top that showed off her nice upper body. Her tits were on the small side but fit her slim figure. Sexy legs extended below her light blue shorts. Joanna had played volleyball in high school and had had a firm body. She wasn't in that same shape, but she still looked damn good to me. How a guy could call her flabby was beyond me.
Kaitlyn got out of the passenger seat and got in the back seat so Joanna could sit next to me. When Joanna got in the car, she said, "Hey Brandon. Long time, no see."
"Ditto. You look great. Are college and work treating you well?"
"I love my job. School's okay. Classes are too easy, and there are some spooky kids in my classes."
As I headed toward the mall, Joanna told me about her college experience. On the way, my phone rang. When I checked it, I saw that the Caller ID was "United States," so I sent it to voice mail.
"Who was that?" Joanna asked. "The girl you're going to go out with after you drop me off?" She tried to make it sound like she was teasing, but it was too barbed and insecure.
Not a great start to a date.
"This girl who works at a furniture store. She keeps calling me even though I've told her time and time again that all I was looking for was one nightstand."